3 Words To Describe Yourself Essay Example

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Sample 1:

I come from an upper middle class family. The most important thing in my life is religious believes, moral values & respect for elders. I am modern thinker but also believe in good values given by our ancestors. I love trekking, going on trips with friends, listening to classical music & watching latest movies.

Sample 2:

I have always been an achiever; be it academics or professional life or sports or any other field in my life. I believe in success through hard work & dedication. My motto in life is to ‘If you want something, work hard & you will achieve it; there are no shot cuts’. I enjoy life to the fullest & love humour. I am a progressive thinker & respect each person’s space & values.

Sample 3:

XXX is genius, intelligent, well cultured, smart & open minded girl. XXX has completed her graduation from ________. Her hobbies include reading, teaching, music, dancing, cooking, traveling etc. You can expect homely behaviour & dedicated up-bringing from XXX.

Sample 4:

I am a very simple, god fearing, caring, talented, understanding, trustworthy and kind hearted human being. I believe in the motto ‘Live and let live’. I hate liars. I am fun loving, down to earth and very much Optimist. I love travelling, sight seeing, listening to rock music, reading all the latest fiction novels.

Sample 5:

I am a soft spoken, honest & talented person. I have a good job, decent salary & a nice house to live in. I think family as the first priority of my life. I think 5 years down the life I should be happily settled with my kids, a lovely soulmate with all the blessings of our parents & relatives.

Sample 6:

I am a ambitious, self-made, work alcoholic but down to earth person. I like to balance professional & family life. Professional life gives you exposure, confidence & sense of achievement. I believe the fulfillment one gets from one’s work is very important for wellbeing. I also participate in family get-togethers, functions, parties, etc. My favourite pastime is to watch English movies, reading fictions & cooking.

Sample 7:

I am a warm, caring, loving & trustworthy person. I share a very special bond with all my friends & family. I love to keep secrets & all the people around me confide their problems to me. I like to help people to find solutions to their problems & also do a lot of social service at NGO’s as I have completed my masters in Social studies. My aim in life is to serve people without any expectation.

Sample 8:

My daughter is 5-4″ wheatish, average body weight & completed her education from XXX. She is working with XXX as a XYZ. She is clever, intelligent and smart looking. She has the capacity to fulfill all her family duties and achieve her professional goals at the same time. She is an excellent cook & knows to cook a variety of cuisines. Her favourite pastime is watching movies, playing guitar, playing indoor sports like table tennis, badminton, carom & swimming.

Sample 9:

XXX is really an accomplished girl & virtuous enough to be equally best at home and office. She is very loving, caring & talkative. Given her beliefs and value system in life, she is going to be an inspiring, compatible and enviable life companion in each and every eventuality.

Sample 10:

I would describe myself as someone who is honest, caring, intelligent, hardworking, and ambitious. I have a great sense of humour. I am an easy going person & don’t get easily disturbed by down’s in my life. I a spiritual person & have a good library of best spiritual books. I also enjoy travelling, watching movies, going out for dinner, and having great intellectual conversations!

Sample 11:

I am honest, caring, intelligent, hardworking, and ambitious. I have a great sense of humour. I am a post-graduate with MBA from one of the premier Indian institute and work as a XXX in one of the top XYZ company. I am passionate about traveling, watching movies and enjoy great chats.

 

 

 

GMAT Club Essay Review 3: Describe yourself in 200 words or fewer




Thanks for reading and welcome to the third post in GMAT Club’s Essay Review Initiative brought to you by Critical Square. Every week or so throughout the summer we’re going to review, comment, and tear apart a real essay from last year. The streets will run red (with ink)! So grab a cup of coffee and read on – this is a great way to see how our admissions consultants, and effectively, an admissions committee looks at your essays. What we like, what we don’t like, and how to avoid mistakes that can sink your application.

If you missed the first reviewed essay on Career Goals, you can catch up [here]!

If you missed the second reviewed essay on Story, you can catch up [here]!

So, without further ado, our third essay!

Our third essay is an “off-the-beaten-path” essay. It’s one of those strange essays that don’t fit neatly into a predefined notion of what an application essay should be and that can be difficult for applicants. This one is short, ambiguous, and filled with traps. The question seems simple enough – “describe yourself in 200 words or fewer”. It is anything but. And, as you’ll see as we break down this essay, the applicant really botched certain parts of it. In a BIG way.

(By the way – this is the IMD essay prompt and it’s being reused this year so FYI!)

So let’s dive into this week’s essay and, at the end, you’ll find some general advice you can apply to these kinds of essays – regardless of the school and the exact prompt!

Quote:

“In Adversity, lies Strength”
I grew up listening to stories of my father’s struggles as a young boy in supporting his family after my grandfather’s untimely death. His journey from a destitute child to the highest serving rank in Indian police has always inspired me to push boundaries, deriving strength from adversities.


Ok, so we’re 52 words into a 200 word essay (> 25%) and we’re talking about this applicant’s father. Don’t get us wrong, it is fine for the applicant to be inspired by his/her father! We sure are. But that isn’t the point of this essay. The point of this essay is to talk about the applicant. Let’s keep going with this example for the purposes of this edit but so far, for those of you keeping track, 1) we’ve wasted a lot of real estate and 2) we haven’t really said a whole lot.

Quote:

To adversity I owe my greatest strength - my creative mind-set. A silent victim of sexual abuse, I became an unconfident, withdrawn child.

Hold the phone – say WHAT?! This is a cardinal sin for application essays. Some of you have gone through some incredibly difficult situations and we are truly sorry that those things have occurred. Whether it’s an addiction or the loss of a close family member or, such as this case, an utterly inexcusable crime, these are not things you share with an admissions committee. No matter how much they shaped you – and they obviously did. This example takes it to a whole other level but even if you want to talk about overcoming something like alcoholism – don’t. Leave those personal issues…well, personal. Moving on…

Quote:

Discreetly, I made collages out of discarded objects and found an unhindered voice in design. Transforming inconsequential things into beautiful products helped me regain my optimism. I decided to become a designer who would design not just products & organizations but the very lives of people.


Our comments here are a reflection of the structure and the tie in this has with an application – NOT with this applicant’s coping mechanism. This individual has clearly shown bravery coming out the other side of this horrific situation with their morale and personality intact and that is quite an accomplishment.

But, that said, this statement is confusing. First off, the connection between the coping activity and a future career is weak. But, beyond that, the statement that they “design lives” is…strange. We’re not sure what the profession of this applicant was exactly but, no matter what it is, this probably doesn’t accurately describe it. It’s actually just too much. When you write essays, be careful not to go off the “prose deep end”.

Quote:

From ‘quest’ to questioning
Due to my father’s frequent transfers, I travelled extensively which instilled a spirit of curiosity and enquiry in me.


As far as introductions to a particular character trait goes, this one is perfectly fine. It is to the point, logical, and sets up the rest of this section well. Could it be rewritten to strengthen it? Of course – we’re not a huge fan of its structure, word choice, and literary vehicles but that’s editing – not a fundamental issue with the content itself.

Quote:

My explorative journey from a jewelry designer to a strategy consultant has been possible due to my unrelenting passion to learn something new each day.


This section is difficult to truly address without a better understanding of the overarching strategy of this applicant’s application but a few thoughts. Firstly, if this is the first time they have discussed their career background then this isn’t sufficient (keep in mind IMD’s other essay prompts which don’t quite lay out a place for the applicant to do this). It’s confusing and, while interesting, raises more questions than it answers. That said, learning something new each day is a great personality trait and we agree with its inclusion. We just disagree here in terms of execution.

Quote:

I have always put myself in demanding situations to accelerate my learning process and donned multiple hats as a salesgirl for Oriflame, freelance fashion model, designer, teacher, entrepreneur and strategy consultant.


To a certain extent, this repeats, with a few more words, and steps, what was written previously. It is also more of a claim than a true example. You could argue that the list of professions is an example in and of itself but still – not a true example. Also, when talking to a business school where they ask you what your goals are, what you want an MBA for, etc. – calling attention to a checkered and disparate background probably isn’t the route you want to go.

A FEW PARTING THOUGHTS:


Overall, this essay does one thing correctly. It focuses on just two examples and tries to build them out rather than cramming in a million things. Whenever you’re dealing with short essay prompts such as this one, the imperative is to balance depth with breath. After all, you need a certain amount of raw words to properly communicate an idea and support it.

Now, that said, this applicant also made two critical errors. The first was the inclusion of an extremely personal and raw example that an MBA application simply isn’t designed to handle. The second issue was the digression from “inquisitive and explorative” to a career nomad. What started out as a good example quickly became the exact opposite and showcased traits a business school doesn’t want to see. They want drive – vision.

Lastly, make sure your themes, traits, and examples tie to what the school is looking for. IMD values an international perspective, a desire to make an impact, strong leadership skills, and the ability to work closely and effectively with others. EVERY part of your application needs to speak to these key themes. Don’t fall into the trap with personal “tell us about you essays” to talk more about what it is important to you than what is important to them.

In conclusion, be purposeful in your examples. Know what you want to communicate, and make sure your examples support those points logically. Don’t leave the reader with more questions than answers and definitely don’t make the reader uncomfortable!
Next week we’ll review another “off-the-beaten-path” essay with Duke’s 25 Things so be sure to check it out!
- The folks CriticalSquare


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